Judging Feedback Form
Five Enchanted Roses Contest
Title: Bleeding Roses
What Could Be Improved: The prologue didn’t feel entirely necessary—most of the information in it was conveyed in the scenes in the first chapter. You could probably just start there. It was a bit hard to sympathize with the Beast after he physically attacked the heroine. Belle seemed to change her feelings about him rather suddenly, just because of the story about his sister. Another incident or two, or a sense of time passing, would probably help.
What I Loved: The dialogue between Belle and the Beast was delightful—I especially liked that he had a sense of humor. The twist of Verda being Beth (and a villain) was great, and the build-up to the climax was page-turning. I enjoyed the bits of humor throughout (the conclusion was delightful).
Thank you so much for sharing this delightful story! I hope you continue to write—I so enjoyed reading the tale that came from your imagination.
So that was actually quite uplifting for me, and put me in a pretty good mood. A complete stranger enjoyed my writing. I love that she mentioned the prologue, because a few people told me to shave down my beginning, but I loved it and couldn't bring myself to cut it out, there is a lesson to be learned about cutting the scene you love the most or something, but I don't think I could ever do that. So it's wasted on me really.
Anyway the last time I lost a contest I got really down about it, and I am here to tell you that is the worse way to respond to rejection. Life is full of losing, you can't win at everything. Sometimes you can't win at anything and it's easy to feel sorry for yourself. I have first hand experience in this, but you have no reason, and I mean NO REASON to feel sorry for yourself. Life is going to beat you down and you only win if you fight back.
This especially applies to writing, because anytime you do a contest or you query. Anything negative will feel like a personal attack, because your writing has you in it. This time I didn't take it that way, I actually went into this with the mind frame that win or lose I would respond the same. I prayed, especially yesterday that God would help me combat my problem's with rejection. He did, and a good thing too, because there is no way I would have been able to do that on my own.
I guess what I am trying to say is losing can be just as beneficial as winning, if you can look at it from a different perspective.
Oh in other news, I plan lengthening my entry till it's about a full length novel and then I am going to publish it as an eBook on Amazon. There was a lot more to the story than I was able to put in. So I am very excited to start working on it.